She sits in the corner booth, watching her friends on the dance floor, but all she can think of is the past. Sipping her drink, visions of the times they’d dance together haunt her, and the loneliness almost brings her to tears.
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So happy to see your contribution to gargleblaster this week! You really must write more so I’m thrilled if my post inspired you to get your fingers tapping on the keys. More please?! ;)))
*blush* you are too kind! Between you and Angie I’m feeling the pressure! I’m hoping to start blogging some writing on a semi-regular basis, I will add it to my calendar so I’m forced to do it!
Tragic to see the past weighing her down. I hope she moves on from the pain 🙁
She’ll be ok, sooner or later.
Aw. This makes me sad.
Sorry! She’ll be ok, I promise.
Aww, sad story, really well written. I have been that girl. There can be nowhere more lonely at 1am than a crowded bar.
Thank you. It’s a tough spot she’s in, but it’s still very fresh. She’ll be ok in the end.
There is a cross eyed rabbit in the ice cubes of the drink. I wouldn’t dance either.
Hehe, I think I see it! Thanks for stopping by
What an emotion-evoking response to the prompt. Great job!
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Those moments can be the hardest. Yearning for what was brings a heavy heart.
Nicely written.
thanks!
Sad. I have been there and done that. Feeling that lonely, I always chose to go home.
I think she’s trying to decide if that would be a better idea too. Thanks for commenting!
aww poor thing. I hope she decides to bust a move and let out the hurt for a little while.
It would be more productive than wallowing, wouldn’t it?
So sad–it’s hard to watch people being happy when you’re feeling lonely.
It sure is. Thanks for visiting.
I’ve been there. I remember that fresh pain and this definitely took me back to it. Great piece and very well done.
Thank you for your kind words – I would say I’m glad I’ve hit the right note with this, but that doesn’t seem appropriate in this case, so I’ll just say it’s gratifying to evoke a response 🙂
You sure captured *that* feeling. Good one!
Thank you! It can be tough to capture a short but big moment in so few words, so it’s good to know I got somewhere close.
so melancholic. you painted the scene so well, like an opening of a novel.
Oh wow thank you! Very kind of you to say so. This will be expanded into a scene in my current WIP, that I hope to one day turn into a novel-length work.
Being ‘lonely’ when you’re not actually alone is sometimes worse than actually being alone….alone in the crowd certainly captures that.
It is a hard feeling, being lonely for one particular person when you should be enjoying the company you have. Thanks for coming by.
So sad! I loved the starkness of the image you created.
Thank you 🙂
You very much hit what you were aiming for here. Well done.
Sometimes you just have to know when you aren’t good company. You captured this moment well, lwd.