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Five Sentence Fiction :: Falling

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The darkness was like a cocoon surrounding her and  the soft glow of the candle beside her. On the bed beside her, a book lay, open, but forgotten, as she stared up at the ceiling, feeling herself being dragged down by the spiral of words running circles through her mind. She blinked, slowly, and the tear that had been gathering in the corner of her eye was forced out, then caught in it’s roll as she swiped frustratedly at it. Happy thoughts, she told herself, trying to bring to mind memories of laughter and light, but the candle wasn’t enough to fight back the darkness of her mind. The words wouldn’t stop coming, and in the end, it was easier to ignore the fall of the tears and give in to the sadness, and hope that tomorrow was a happier day.



Um, wow. Well that turned a lot more glum than I planned. Don’t write while tired, kids! Joining in for Five Sentence Fiction this week, with the prompt “Falling”

  • Car

    Oh. Em. Gee. This is beautiful – dark yes – but oh so beautifully written x

    October 19, 2014 at 8:56 am Reply
      • Car

        Grab a journal and brain dump – then write and see if its lighter?

        October 19, 2014 at 9:29 am Reply
  • H.P. Liebekraft

    Please do not ever apologize for writing dark/depressive work. We don’t live on the Disneyland Planet. People feel sad, and it’s nothing to apologize for.
    Some people (myself included) live with mood disorders. This certainly isn’t singling you out, but I get so tired of people apologizing for writing dark material. This is what our culture has taught us: that we are being a burden when we express anything other than Stepford happiness. This simply isn’t true.

    October 19, 2014 at 11:44 am Reply
    • Shail

      I agree @H.P. Liebekraft

      October 22, 2014 at 1:42 pm Reply
  • i b arora

    more often than not we don’t let the tears fall, nice work

    October 20, 2014 at 9:03 pm Reply
  • Shail

    But it has come out beautifully. You must write more when you are tired! 🙂

    October 22, 2014 at 1:40 pm Reply
  • Ams

    Once again, whoa! You have no idea what a balm this is for me each time I read it. Thanks for sharing it. It’s perfect the way it is! LOVE LOVE LOVE!

    October 29, 2014 at 2:26 pm Reply

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