Visual dare #23 : peeking

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The crowd jostled him, as he made his way down the narrow alley. A burst of sunlight, and Tomas found himself in a tiny market square. He let himself be buffeted, carried by the crowd towards the dark opening that was his destination. He detached himself from the crowd and eased down the alley, empty and uninviting. A movement caught his eye, and he spun around, but the alley was empty, just himself and the brick walls. And yet. 30 years coming down here, and he’d never noticed that one smirking gargoyle brick. He stared, but it remained resolutely still.


Linking up, late as usual, for Visual Dare with Angela at Anonymous Legacy. If you haven’t read her blog yet, go check out her Welsan series, I promise you’ll be hooked!


    • says

      Thanks JoAnn. It was really hard to cull down, as you say, the image in my mind is so clear, I kept wanting add more, which is the polar opposite of what flash fiction is about! I’m glad it works though, thanks for your kind words!

      • says

        These flash challenges are wonderful for practicing concentration of story elements. I have a terrible habit of wanting to race to the conclusion of a story but it doesn’t make for very interesting reading! Finally dawned on me I should add in some “pictures” to help the reader see what I saw so clearly in my head. You do that wonderfully already! You are 20 steps ahead! Always enjoy reading your pieces. :))

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