Visual dare #23 : peeking
The crowd jostled him, as he made his way down the narrow alley. A burst of sunlight, and Tomas found himself in a tiny market square. He let himself be buffeted, carried by the crowd towards the dark opening that was his destination. He detached himself from the crowd and eased down the alley, empty and uninviting. A movement caught his eye, and he spun around, but the alley was empty, just himself and the brick walls. And yet. 30 years coming down here, and he’d never noticed that one smirking gargoyle brick. He stared, but it remained resolutely still.
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Linking up, late as usual, for Visual Dare with Angela at Anonymous Legacy. If you haven’t read her blog yet, go check out her Welsan series, I promise you’ll be hooked!
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Oh very nice. I like the photo but like the writing more.
Thanks Trent! It’s a very intriguing image, isn’t it? I love seeing what Angela finds in her travels to spark off a new adventure in words.
Ok this is creepy, love it!
Thanks Laura!
this feels like it is part of a larger piece. When I was reading it, I could tell that the scene is crystal clear in your mind. Mysterious and really set the mood well :)))
Thanks JoAnn. It was really hard to cull down, as you say, the image in my mind is so clear, I kept wanting add more, which is the polar opposite of what flash fiction is about! I’m glad it works though, thanks for your kind words!
These flash challenges are wonderful for practicing concentration of story elements. I have a terrible habit of wanting to race to the conclusion of a story but it doesn’t make for very interesting reading! Finally dawned on me I should add in some “pictures” to help the reader see what I saw so clearly in my head. You do that wonderfully already! You are 20 steps ahead! Always enjoy reading your pieces. :))
*blush* you are too kind *mwah*
Oooooo this feels like a fairy tale waiting to happen. Love this!! Such a feel of pull, almost of destiny, bringing him to this place at such a time….! Wonder what happens next? 😀
Argh! And comments like that tempt me into new WIPs when I don’t have time the WIP I have! Though a 1000 short isn’t really a WIP, is it? *opens Word*
Different style to the usual L&P installment (assuming this is NOT mynew favourite couple?) well done on this, I really like the mystery!
You are right, Tomas is completely unrelated to L&P. I liked the imagery of the little face peeking out too much to resist!